FSF Challenge - Companion



Lillie McFerrin Writes
This week's writing challenge from
Five Sentence Fiction
( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:


Companion


What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie posts one word for inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.







The Bottle







Image "Bottle" by Zole4 courtesy of FreeDigitalPhotos.Net




Beside the bed,

Upon a stand,

A bottle and a note

Spoke to sorrows

And of pain

With every word he wrote.



 She held his hand,

His dying hand,

Softly in her own,

And felt the life

Within it pass,

Leaving her alone.



 Tenderly,

She crossed his arms 

Upon his now still breast,

Then laid herself 

Down next to him,

Next to him to rest.



 In grief, 

The bottle called to her,

Glowing in the light,

And when it touched 

Against her lips

Her eyes closed to this life. 



 I wish to think 

She found her love

Upon that distant shore,

Then took his hand

And shared a kiss,

Companions evermore.





                                        K. R. Smith



Image "Bottle" courtesy of Zole4 / FreeDigitalPhotos.net



© 2012-2014 K. R. Smith All rights reserved

Comments

  1. AnonymousMarch 29, 2014 at 10:40 AM

    Unique, interesting poem!

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    1. K R SmithMarch 29, 2014 at 3:03 PM

      Thanks! I wasn't sure how this would come across, but I'm glad you found something in it to like.

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  2. TessMarch 29, 2014 at 4:50 PM

    Beautiful and sad.
    I like the second stanza, especially "She held his hand, his dying hand". Very poignant.

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    1. K R SmithMarch 31, 2014 at 12:32 PM

      Thanks, Tess. I was trying to get that sort of contrast, and I hope it worked. Now I have to find time to read everyone else's FSF posts for this!

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  3. injaynesworldMarch 30, 2014 at 5:17 PM

    K.R., this is as lovely as it is tragic. Just like Romeo and Juliet. Very nice work.

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  4. Sushree DashMarch 31, 2014 at 10:25 AM

    Heart touching poetry ...

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    1. K R SmithMarch 31, 2014 at 12:34 PM

      Thank you, Sushree. It's always good to see new readers!

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  5. Robin Leigh MorganApril 13, 2014 at 2:31 PM

    The joy of more than fifty years of life together couldn't come to end for this couple. For the moment she realized he'd passed, she drank the poison from the small brown bottle. The moment she drank the life-ending potion she kissed his cold lips as caressed his lifeless body, so they would be in each other's embrace forever more. Definitely sad and quite poignant.

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    1. K R SmithApril 13, 2014 at 10:25 PM

      Thanks, Robin! I can see you visualized the story quite well!

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