FSF Challenge - Flowers






Lillie McFerrin Writes

This week's writing challenge from


Five Sentence Fiction


( Lillie McFerrin Writes ) is based upon the prompt:




Flowers







Before we proceed to my entries for flowers, I'd like to mention (shameless plug time) that I have had another short story accepted. A blog post about it and other submissions is here. I hope someday to actually see the stories that have been accepted in print. Acceptance is good; printing is better.



Now, back to our regularly scheduled stories...






I haven't done a poem for a while, so I thought I'd give one a try.









The Last Roses









Image "Flowers On The Cross" by topstep07 at www.freedigitalphotos.net






I lay them down before you;

An offering you neither accept

Nor refuse.



Your eyes cannot see

The colors they show,

Your mind indifferent to their splendor.



They offer their fragrance to the air

That, although sweetly graced by their presence,

Drifts away unnoticed.



Your hands,

No longer troubled by the painful thorns,

Cannot enjoy the silken petals.



And yet I lay them down,

These useless tokens,

Because they are all I have.





                         K. R. Smith








And as a bonus feature...









The First Date


Image "Blond Girl On The Camomile Field" by -Marcus- at www.freedigitalphotos.net





     "You're staring at me again! Stop it!"
     "Sorry," he replied, looking away uncomfortably.

     It was their first date, and the day had gone so terribly wrong that whatever he said came out as awkward or backward or worse to the point where he said little at all. How could he possibly explain the way she made the flowers in her hair look so beautiful instead of the other way around?






Image "Flowers On The Cross" by topstep07 / FreeDigitalPhotos.net



Image "Blond Girl On The Camomile Field" by -Marcus- / FreeDigitalPhotos.net




© 2012-2013 K. R. Smith All rights reserved

Comments

  1. Melanie ColeSeptember 13, 2013 at 4:30 PM

    Loved it. Loved all of it!! Beautifully done.

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    1. K R SmithSeptember 14, 2013 at 5:21 AM

      Thanks! I have to do a poem once in a while to keep in practice.

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 13, 2013 at 9:52 PM

    Oh, a heartbreaking poem. Well written.

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    1. K R SmithSeptember 14, 2013 at 5:07 AM

      Thanks! I have a number of writings that have taken at least some inspiration from Tennyson's In Memoriam A.H.H., a work that I am drawn to over and over.

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  3. UnknownSeptember 14, 2013 at 8:02 PM

    Your poem...

    It went so deep! I can relate to any one, and all, of your doleful lines!

    The light conjunction of the bonus is beautiful. Who, when in love, has not felt the ludicrous edge of behaviour!

    I enjoyed your writing no end!

    Thank you!

    PS:Congrats for the new acceptance, I hope you get it in print soon!!

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    1. K R SmithSeptember 14, 2013 at 8:59 PM

      Thanks so much for your kind comments. I have to admit, the delays are starting to wear on me. I really want to be able to show people a real book with some of my writing in it!

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  4. AnonymousSeptember 15, 2013 at 3:32 AM

    Congratulations first of all!
    Secondly, I loved both your pieces - especially the line in your bonus offering - 'How could he possibly explain the way she made the flowers in her hair look so beautiful instead of the other way around?'

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    1. K R SmithSeptember 15, 2013 at 9:00 AM

      Thanks!

      And I do empathize with the poor fellow in the bonus entry. It reminds me of my own efforts at courting - hyperventilation interspersed with periods of attempting to remember my own name...

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  5. Rum-Punch DrunkSeptember 15, 2013 at 11:48 AM

    Your poem reminds me of those who are no longer with us. Those who no longer have a choice and we cannot hear their voice. We think for them and talk for them but like the flower they once had a tangible beauty which is no more. Lovely poem mate.

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    1. K R SmithSeptember 15, 2013 at 9:19 PM

      That's an interesting and unique comment. I'm always fascinated when someone's comment teaches me something about my own work, and you've made me think a little deeper into what I've written. Thanks!

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  6. injaynesworldSeptember 16, 2013 at 7:05 PM

    The poem is absolutely exquisite. You engaged all my senses. And the tiny tale held such charm. Bravo, KR.

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    1. K R SmithSeptember 17, 2013 at 1:08 PM

      Thanks! I have been neglecting my poetry - I should do a bit more of it.

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  7. PatriciaSeptember 16, 2013 at 11:42 PM

    Beautiful and eloquent.

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    1. K R SmithSeptember 17, 2013 at 9:16 PM

      Thanks! A comment can't get any better than that!

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